This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-08-01 23:30:38 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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But then

Would I could offer coloring book life    pages of crayon smeared joyful flutter But then Stand on a bridge imagine clear water      teaming shapes weaving playful shadow But then Bring you close hold you to all senses   imagine you would never leave  But then Have hope in mongrels offering pretense   with word thoughts they do not have But then I would not be a poet  and You would not be loved. 
Copyright © August 2013 James C. Horak

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2013-08-09 17:46:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi JCH, this poem is different than most of your poetry and I do like it. First I must ask...are you smitten? (smile) You have made expressive word choices, the flow is even, good use of enjambments to keep the flow pure. I like the brevity as it says just what it has to and no more. This is lovely, sir, give us more like this. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2013-08-06 13:06:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
The exceptional or the cynical; merged into a single image. One has to decide whether the images imagined from moving water are those seen by any onlooker, or only the poet who deciphers more. And of love? Lost love? I think- everyone hurts the same but undoubtedly the poet interprets it with greater flourish. I know, I know; metaphor and what’s it for. Nevertheless.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-08-04 10:45:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Reminds me of the bard himself. The imagery is excellent as always. The last line is one of the best closing lines I have read in awhile
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