This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-09-27 14:40:55 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Its 7am
Its 7 am and the morning sun
whispers greetings to my waking ears
I arises from
my sleep and wonder
at the day and its offerings
My cats
two in all
keep vigil
by the window for
killer birds or dangerous
dust bunnies
The coffee has finished
its creation and awaits
for me to stumble it into a mug
and fumble it to its new destiny
The sky scrappers of Toronto
seemed to be growing
like cement flowers
from tender soil
Each, stands in testimony of
being closer to the buck
yet the morning softens the
endeavour
I am content that all
is as it was meant to be
watching the morning
watching me |
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Copyright © September 2013 Joe Gustin
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2013-10-11 19:48:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
How very delightful your morning poem is, easy flowing and quite discriptive. I could smell the coffee, feel the liesurely mode and enjoy the view. Thank you for sharing. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-10-04 21:18:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
"arise" instead of arises, unless it's cockney. Otherwise a poem entertaining in its imagery with the warmth of day in an easily associated routine. Where "less is more". Liked it. JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2013-10-03 23:59:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
The last verse completes your poem - contentment found in the morning is such a positive way to start a day. Your first three verses introduce this piece with a nice easy flow of chosen words that find their impact where you have used wonderful imagery to show the unfolding day.
I have to say for myself personally the fourth verse stands out in imagery - it has a wonderful line with sky scrappers that compare in beauty to flowers standing tall -
All in all a good read -
Deni
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