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After The Rain After the rain heaven is reflected in the puddles that surround our feet God cried today in an effort to get our attention Bringing heaven to our soles for those souls who no longer look up |
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-08-09 08:55:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe, you show an elegant simplicity in this poem. To further compliment that, I would suggest avoiding the sentence string. For instance, "After the rain"/heaven reflects/the puddles/where we step. I don't often suggest particular rewrite to anyone but your poem has that possibility and you strike me as having the potential to improve beyond vanity. So many don't. JCH