This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-05-06 02:20:24 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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In Dim Words strike newly aspiring too
touch shimmering water renew
Not so sharp this sky in age tell
fluttering twilight magic spell
The glisten unties mind to see
prompting dimness upon the free
Canvas wherein Picasso is seen stark
not a bit in dimness but clarity dark |
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Copyright © May 2013 James C. Horak
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-06-01 14:07:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Great flow in the poem. I admire any work that leads me so effortlessly Thankyou
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2013-05-22 15:48:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi JCH,
I have had so much trouble getting into this site but finally used another browser and it worked. This is one of those poems that begs to be pondered. Good alliteration in seen/stark and good enjambments throughout. I am glad to see you write without a lot of punctuation, instead you have let your line breaks work for you. Your word choices are expressive and the flow is easy. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheynne
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