This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-02-17 01:12:56 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Dying Winds

Eyes hide in antique lines tears cascade where echoes keep memories safe She gathers stars from clouds of night shapes them to fit her heart that weeps in shallow runes Words pile in corners afraid to speak lest shackled meanings seem trite like whispers washing away truth Eyes and heart closed she awaits dying winds

Copyright © February 2010 cheyenne smyth


This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2010-02-24 03:26:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Cheyenne This is a touch too saccharin for my palate. A bit "too easy". And 'dying winds' in title and last line seems a bit unconnected to the poem. I get the 'sadness' motif, but I think you've let yourself off too lightly here, old sausage. Best wishes Mark


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-02-18 15:54:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A unique and delightful poem, speaks deeply to the heart and the sadness of careless words--their affects. I hope the feelings soon dispell, excellent in meter and word. Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2010-02-17 01:22:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Cheyenne, The anticipation of 'dying winds' speaks a of a hope that is lost. The heart seems to have resigned itself to the defeat of loss. The setting is good - the quiet night, the gathering of stars, the resonance of weeping....There is an undelying softness here, enhanced by the images. A nice poem. Duane.
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