This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2007-05-12 10:48:29 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A Moment's Day A moment's day moving into night
streaming horizon in changing lapsing
color
Wrought no more in closing but with
bird song
Simple things brought fantastic.
Winged-backed shapes chase
clamorous clouds unannounced
by dinner bell
While I, my next great thought,
to find love on a supper plate.
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Copyright © May 2007 James C. Horak
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2007-05-27 01:14:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84615
Hi James....you have excellent imagery in this poem. Your words do make me pause and reflect at how simple life really is. Days always become the night no matter how we feel or what we desire...the one contant in our lives. However, finding love is not so simple...some fall in and out of it so easy which always makes me wonder how deep their feelings really can be. I like this piece...simple yet quite profound.
cheers...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2007-05-24 00:07:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear James;
This work extolls the beauty and virtue of recognizing
the simple things in the authors life, like interacting
with the environment by witnessing a sunset where a moment's day moves into night...
that sliver of time where the sun beams stream over the horizon, creating fantastic
shadows and birds, perhaps bats,seem to chase clamorous clouds, while sky surfing for
insects, while the author relishes his next great thought, to find love on a supper plate.
Extremely nice way of putting it... finding love on a supper plate...more than just sustenance
for the physical being, but the committment of partnership for life, which is the basis of making a house a home and a family....
truly love on a supper plate is more profound than a simple dinner...
and a romantic meal it is at sunset, for a man who is secure in his surroundings through
the love he shares with his soulmate...
I like the poem James....the mettle of a poet is shown through an almost effortless
ease in making the mundane seem profound and vital...
Thanks for this treat,
your friend,
Gerard
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2007-05-16 20:25:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
James,
This is yummy, wistful, work of the dreamer; a side of you I don't believe I've seen before. Even with all the wonderfully discriptive images you've laid out the deep thinker in you still comes through. I especially liked "While I, my next great thought,
to find love on a supper plate",
ever evolving you move beyond the box, the confines of what is known. I found this write very stimulating mentally, thank you.
Best always,
Lora
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2007-05-15 20:02:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
JCH
How simple things expand into seeming eternal. Or at least, calling to be eternalised.
The line "love on a supper plate" is risky: seems a bit of a come-down from the peak...
...unless, of course, it is the much-anticipated denouement to the otherwise marvellous day.
MAH
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2007-05-14 18:23:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear James,
I like the idea of a love affair with your dinner - (it's sweet) in the eyes of a woman.
Days move so quickly - and nights even faster it seems - this I've noticed as I get older.
I like the imagery of streaming horizon in changing lapsing color - a defined picture in imagery, that comes to life in the poem. Very nice.
This poems shows us beauty, makes us feel rested - and makes me a little hungry. There is a certain calm about it which I really appreciated.
Very good poem, wouldn't change a thing. What did you have that night for dinner?
sincerely,
Denimari
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2007-05-14 18:09:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
James,
Nice, simple, non-controversial subject.
Sometimes I like quiet, simplicity. Like being home for supper.
Not everything is a big trauma. And the littlest things can be so great.
And I'm very pleased with your awareness.
My herbalist taught me......The highest education is simplicity.
With his studying of health cases, the answers can be so simple.
most everything is not as complex as we make it.
now as far as government/politics/science thats another ball game....
I'm great at filling supper plates....I can send your cook a few secrets she'll love.
Just say the word.
Dellena
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