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This Poem was Submitted By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2005-05-16 14:37:34 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Sometimes

Sometimes When I feel like Writing My brain Shouts “LEAVE ME ALONE!”

Additional Notes:
And I do.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-06-07 22:42:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91489
Mine too Kenneth. Great observation, and I love the emphasis that you put on "leave me alone." That must be what's going on when we have the feelings, but can't seem to produce the words or pen them on paper. "Sometimes." Great statement. Great truth. Great poem. Latorial www.latorialfaison.com

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-06-03 17:56:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I had to chuckle when I read this. While I can't presume to know what to tell you as to the technical aspects of your piece I can say it was an easy read, it flowed, and I definately can relate. Writing creatively or otherwise can not be forced, it has to come when we are comfortable with what we pen.

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2005-05-31 21:07:45
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Kenneth, Hi, I can certainly appreciate this piece - and wanted to tell you so. It seems like when I want to write, have the time, energy and feeling to do so - nothing comes to mind. Then as I sleepily try to fall asleep, all of these things come to mind to write - but I feel to lazy to get up and do it. I enjoyed this short piece - I think everyone will. You might have included your note, as the ending to it. It works. Sincerely, DeniMari

This Poem was Critiqued By: Rebecca B. Whited On Date: 2005-05-31 19:34:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Kenneth, How aptly expressed this is! My brain has been shouting at me for some time now, and I wish it would stop! I like the personification of the brain shouting commands at you, rather than stimulating your pen in hand and stimulating your senses. I think we all feel this way at times. I hope it tells you to put your pen to paper soon. Thanks for the uplifting read, Later, Beck

This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-05-21 00:45:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84000
Hi Kenneth, Hope all is well with you. I thoroughly appreciate and admire short poems that speak volumes. 'Sometimes', is one such poem that addresses what most poets feel when confronted with a brain that shouts, '“LEAVE ME ALONE!”. And eventhough it is the heart that spurs the emotions of poets, it is the brain or 'the poetic touch, talent or genius', that serves as an outlet for those emotions to be communicated in a poetically effective way. The sense I get from reading this piece is not just your allusion to the curse of writer's block but your handling of the same, "Leave me alone...And I do". You don't seem to force anything out when confronted with these situations. Some people (like myself) will keep pushing and pushing only to add to our frustrations. I can picture the heart prodding the brain to deliver it's feelings. A well delivered piece that digs deep and speaks of a very realistic situation confronting most of us in the community. Very well done!! Take care, Duane.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2005-05-17 18:31:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.88235
kenneth, those are the times you write from the heart. put away the ego, the brain. write from 'the mind, which is the all of you. the brain, analyzes, discounts, criticizes,and has an agenda. dump the agenda. write good, bad, no matter.....just write. and you may be surprised what you let yourself say. leave the brain away......your not doing 'business'. your sharing your soul when you write. try, you'll like it. peace, my good man, speak forth. dellena

This Poem was Critiqued By: charles r pitts On Date: 2005-05-17 17:42:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
the greatest battles ive ever fought, the worst suffering endured, the strongest fear ever faced, the deepest pain and heaviest burden carried, the toughest challenges ive ever struggled with have all been born from internal conflict and the wrestling with my own mind. sometimes it is best to leave it be.. this is cool especially with the add. notes. charlie

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-05-17 07:47:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.81818
Hi Kenneth, Oh, I do know how you feel!! "My brains shouts...."LEAVE ME ALONE!" A few days ago Mell posted a poem about writers block....unfortunately something that happens to all writers. You are right we should stop trying to write if we are not inspired. At times an idea will come to me that begs to be written and those are the best poems but when I force them they are usually pretty stinky. Also I found that if I read poetry it helps put me back on track...glad you posted this one it feels good to know we are not alone when the words won't come. Peace...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-05-16 19:15:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90476
Just what I needed to see tonight.........one who has talks with his brain and in the end, leaves it alone......enjoyed the structure, word flow, feelings also associated with this one..........reminds me of me again, having written nothing in so very very long though when I go to bed at night my brain does not shut off.......try to get up and write and nothing happens.....so its back to bed and a head full of words.......thanks for sharing, posting this for all to find.........Hope all is well in your world.........Spring time in New England has finally arrived and the black flies too.......... God Bless, Claire

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