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This Poem was Submitted By: Edwin John Krizek On Date: 2004-09-10 15:13:23 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Enough

It is enough to lead a good life waking in the morning to a day full of splendor and fraught with cares. It is enough to love and be loved by friends and family instead of raging amidst life’s turmoil. It is enough to have lived well rather than covet immortality, rather than fight for honor and glory. It is enough to lie down next to your spouse at night and know that this day you have done all you could to be a positive force in the world. It is enough to dream of simple things that do not require the strength and determination of the gods. It is enough that you live knowing that you are a man and your actions matter.

Additional Notes:
I am trying to find out which of two poems works better. They are called "Enough" and "Enough2". One is free verse the other is metered. If you read this please take a moment to look at "Enough2" and let me know what you think.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2004-10-06 22:57:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.84375
Edwin, I read both poems before commenting on either. However, I read this one first since I thought it was version one. I like this poem. I think we get more of the gamut here as you enlighten us on "enough." I somehow get the impression that you're being facetious or even intentionally sarcastic when you say that it's enough to do all of these things. Most people don't think these are enough. We can never have enough, and even when we have enough, we unsurprisingly want more it seems. Either you are a very rational, rare and smart guy or you're just making fun at the rest of the world who run around in search of something great only to find out that the only true greatness is not wrapped up in things, but that it's wrapped up in the soul and intertwined in the mind and spirit. You speak of the good life, love and simple things. Most people want the good life, but they don't consider that it's laced with simple things. So, with this poem you have sparked such a necessary discussion on who we are as people and why we long for the things that we do. Again, I like this poem. It reads well, has style and is poetically speaking to the issues of humanity. Thanks for sharing it at TPL. Great poem. Latorial www.latorial.com

This Poem was Critiqued By: Karen Ann Jacobs On Date: 2004-10-03 15:31:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.72727
I like this one better. There is more passion and feeling in this one, and perhaps that is because the flow isn’t constrained. I really like it, too and I think it is enough. I hope my vote helps. Kay

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2004-09-17 22:26:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.55556
Dear Edwin, I like this poem better than the 2nd one, much better. The shorter verses didn't please me as much as this does. The other poem didn't have as great an impact on me as this does. The other poem was lacking the emotion that this one has. All of the points made in this poem are true, I agree with your statements. It is enough to dream of simple things - some of the sweetest moments in life are full of these and are cherished for years. I also agree that everyone matters - and at night we should feel we've done "enough" in the day to please ourselves and those closest to us. Good job on these - a lot of thought provoking statements and written in a clear compehendable manner. Sincerely, DeniMari

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-09-15 15:22:02
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I like the format and reading of the second poem though I am sure others will prefer this one....just a matter of choice......I know I enjoy the uplifting it brings along with the messages it sings......again, thanks for posting and sharing with us.......God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Gerard A Geiger On Date: 2004-09-15 10:07:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
DEear EJK; See my response to enough2... It is enough that you live knowing that you are a man and your actions matter. This triplet...makes the poem...it is the overarching theme...It is real, it comes from the heart...it is a man's final justification between himself and his existence ina world in which he is brainwashed...through media, to believe he is in competition with all fellow beings...It is his final summation that he exists and his actions matter... i.e.have meaning...are somehow worthwhile....even meritorious in their simple way. Gerard

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jana Buck Hanks On Date: 2004-09-13 12:56:57
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Hi Edwin, I have read both version of this poem and have to say that I like this one best. Some how I think using enjambment might work here too instead of the endstops. Then endstops make each stanza so final...and then the reader has to start over again with the next verse. Just a suggestion. I thik the last two verses say it all: It is enough to dream of simple things that do not require the strength and determination of the gods. It is enough that you live knowing that you are a man and your actions matter. The subject matter and diction of the poem is excellent. I am honored that you have shared this with us. I will make the comment of which choice I have made on the 2nd poem of Enough...but think I will not comment outwardly on it. Bright Blessings Jana

This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-09-11 20:46:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Ed, Please read my comments on 'Enough 2' Great poems but I really like the form you used in 'Enough'....again thanks or posting these spirit lifting poems. Peace...Marilyn

This Poem was Critiqued By: James Edward Schanne On Date: 2004-09-10 18:17:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.66667
This certainly reminds me of something I always think of when people say we've got to change the world, I make the world a better place by doing what I can to make that part of it I exist in better by my actions. I'll wait until I read the second to comment.

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