This Poem was Submitted By: Cathy Hill Cook On Date: 2004-05-29 19:14:06 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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What I Wish For In A Friend
What can I wish for in a friend like you?
I hope you know the gratitude I have by the way you treat me,
for all the truth
and unconditional love you show.
The understanding of my nature you allow me with integrity.
Always telling me how I have grown
and done such good work.
I wish to tell you how proud I am
to have you as my very special friend.
Watching all the accomplishments
you have brought forth gives me such pride.
As not only do we share our gifts with one another,
but also you have taught me
to reach out into the world
and give out my gifts as well.
For you have touched so many lives
and with this you have shown me
how to do so as well.
I wish you to know just how much I care
and enjoy just talking with you,
hearing of your dreams
and ideas as they unfold about the day.
Our sharing with each other
in our individual unique perspectives
with such respect upon each idea and thought with such interest.
I have always wished for a special friend like you
that cares how I am feeling,
as I truly know that you do as I so do you too.
For it is such a rare treasure and a hard find,
to have such a friendship as ours
with enough spacing to allow
such wisdom and knowledge of individuals of the minds. |
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Copyright © May 2004 Cathy Hill Cook
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lennard J. McIntosh On Date: 2004-06-06 14:59:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.65217
Re: "What I Wish For In A Friend"
The poem's title also sets its theme:
Writer: "I hope you know the gratitude I have by the way you treat me,
for all the truth
and unconditional love you show"
LJMC: The poem's persona confesses deep feelings because of the love showed by the
friend. Those feelings extend to pride of the friend as a person and pride of their
accomplishments. It is true friendship when one doesn't feel threatened by the other - is proud
of how well the other does.
Writer: "such a rare treasure and a hard find,
to have such a friendship as ours
with enough spacing to allow
such wisdom and knowledge of individuals of the minds."
LJMC: Men and women who've lived many decades know how rare true friendship is to find,
and they understand the value of such abstract commodity.
There is something the persona didn't mentioned, or, has omitted out of humility. Perhaps
even, the writer didn't think of it. That is, to have a friend of such high esteem one
invariably must be a friend of equal worth. This is merely a cliche? I beg to suggest not. It
is life, the way it works. It is reciposity in action! That is the crafting genius that allows
the development of one's character equal to the task of being a special friend. To have that
kind of a friend one simple must must BE that kind of a friend.
Moreover, this principle is within the poem, if the reader exerts the discernment to see
between the lines.
Thank you most heartily for a fine, insightful, well-crafted piece of poetry.
A fellow poet, Lennard McIntosh
This Poem was Critiqued By: G. Donald Cribbs On Date: 2004-06-06 11:34:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.87805
Cathy,
I have not seen you here before on the Link, so welcome! I hope you find a home here and enjoy reading, critiquing, and posting your own poems here. I liked this poem, and think you have a nice casual or conversational tone to your writing. That's not an easy thing to come across without sometimes sounding disjointed or perhaps clunky, but you manage to speak smoothly and clearly and your lines flow nicely into one another. Good job!
There is certainly truth to the subject of this poem. So many truths we think of when pondering what a true friend is. If you do indeed have this in someone, count yourself lucky and blessed! It is a rare gift to have a friend like the one you describe here so vividly. I am reminded of David and Jonathan from the Bible, their friendship transcended class, culture, and stands as an example of how two people can put aside their differences and give of themselves and receive from another. This poem reminds me of that, and I appreciate that you shared this with us.
I hope my comments are helpful to you as the writer, to know what a reader thought of your poem. I don't have any suggestions for improving this, I think you said it all and you have left nothing out. I look forward to reading more by you.
All the best,
Don
This Poem was Critiqued By: Marcia McCaslin On Date: 2004-06-03 21:36:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61111
Cathy--I know I'm a 'late-comer' on critiqueing this month, but I am stunned by the simplicity
and originality of this sentiment--and how universal it is--but it's almost like "no one" actually
SAYS it--but you are undressing your deepest sentiments for us--and saying I have always wished for
a special friend like you--that cares how I am feeling. It's almost like asking: Will you be my
best friend.--except in 'lover's language' that is so from-the-heart. It almost has the innocence
of childhood interwoven. I'm guessing that most of us readers are wishing with all our hearts that
you are indeed speaking to US.
Lovely sentiment--the kind that I expect to find in Heaven! Thanks for sharing. Thanks so much.
Marcia
This Poem was Critiqued By: Nancy Anne Korb On Date: 2004-06-01 23:20:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.43750
Hi Cathy, nice to meet you. Your poem made me feel as if you were speaking to me, even though we haven't ever met before. It's a lovely thank you. You lost me in a couple of places though...."as I truly know that you do as I so do you too...sounds a little like the old song VOODOO....but I didn't get the gist. Maybe I'm just thick tonight. The other place that I didn't quite get was "with enough spacing to allow"...followed by the next line "such wisdom and knowledge of individuals of the minds..I didnt' get the connection between spacing and wisdom and knowledge...but once again, maybe it's just me.
I rather enjoyed the poem besides that. Though I'm not so good with the technical stuff yet.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-06-01 11:34:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I don't have so much a critique of your work as comments. I like the general gratefulness shown here. The language is plain, direct and straightforward, which is to be expected of such a work. The points you bring up are quite appropriate as a tribute to the friend. Good job.
Thanks,
REEG!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wayne R. Leach On Date: 2004-05-30 10:09:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.33333
Cathy, I am certain that the sentiments expressed here are very much appreciated - whomever the friend may be. I will be honest, and hope you expect nothing more, but this seems more like a note to the friend, rather than a poem. You appear to be telling them you appreciate them, rather than showing it with imagery and sounds. I encourage you to really make this person feel and experience, through more sensual and pictoral language, the love and caring you have for him/her. Thanks for sharing this message with us, though, and hope I have not discouraged you with my harsh honesty. Best wishes for happiness and peace. wrl
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2004-05-29 21:30:47
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.14286
Dear Cathy,
This is a very well written, sentimental tribute to those we are fortunate to have in our lives, our dearest
friends.
I don't think I would change anything in this, because it moved me, just as it was written. It has a deep spiritual touch to it, and a sincerity that holds the readers attention and leaving the reader wanting more to read.
I absolutely fell in love with this,
Sincerely,
DeniMari
P.S. I also forwarded it on to one of my most treasured friends.
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