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I Sit Here I sit here in the peacefulness Of my own solitude I am here at my own expense Nobody to corrupt the thoughts That are running so frantically Through my mind I sit here in the peacefulness of The forest I am here at the world's expense Everybody to corrupt the beauty Of the magnificant sight in front of me I am at a point in my life Where I'd rather not be Though there is nothing in my power That can change what I am about to do The destiny of my life is Unchangable and I will have to Deal with the chaos of the world's challenges Just to get the destiny that is mine Even if I do not want it I sit here in the peacefulness of my own self I am here at the expense of nothing I accept everything that happens in My lifetime even if it is for the worst I will be stronger then my weakest link I will accomplish my dreams I will accomplish them on my own I will then be complete I will then be fulfilled I sit here in the peacefulness of nowhere I am here at nobody's expense I know only what I have taught myself I know only what you have taught me I am striving for that knowledge That is what I yearn for I deserve to have that knowledge And when the last piece of knowledge Seeps slowly into my soul I will then be complete I will then have all I need I sit here in the peacefulness of peace Expense no longer exists I am complete I am fulfilled I have no weak links I am complete I am fulfilled I am at a point in my life where I deserve to be Where I have been striving to be I have accomplished my dreams I yearn no more I am now complete I sit here in the peacefulness Of my own solitude. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2004-02-07 17:01:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25000
Dear Robin,
I'm able to easily relate to this piece - it's very thought inspiring and easy to read.
The following verse had the most impact on me - sending out the message that we are responsible
and able to fulfill our dreams if we really want to - alone without help from anyone. We know we learn from mistakes, and the worst of what happens to us does tend to make us stronger. You've said it in an imaginative and creative way.
I sit here in the peacefulness of my own self
I am here at the expense of nothing
I accept everything that happens in
My lifetime even if it is for the worst
I will be stronger then my weakest link
I will accomplish my dreams
I will accomplish them on my own
Your poem is very good and there is nothing I would do to change it. Thank you for a really nice read.
DeniMari