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While Having a Beer While having a beer I thought of you dear brought back memories to shuffled like playing cards Laying them out on the table in some terrible game of solitaire. What to do about the undone of us the forget me knots that have yet to be plucked. I go for a walk and cast prayers from my thoughts hoping they catch the wind and find their way to you I dream of you long and often Yet the reality of your presence is so much better then dream |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2015-05-16 19:42:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe,
As often with you, you give us some great lines and then sort of revert into, well, things like the last stanza.
The poignant, powerful stanza(s):
Laying them out on the table
in some terrible game of
solitaire.
**wonderful metaphor**
I go for a walk
and cast prayers from my thoughts
hoping they catch the wind
and find their way to you
**great . . . objectification of "prayers"**