This Poem was Submitted By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2012-10-11 14:54:08 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Beautiful October Cooler nights
the days muster warmth
the leaves have turned
and are falling.
The trout are still biting
winter forebodes
its cold-hearted presence.
There is still
work to be done
to insure the summer's
remembrance.
Trick or treat
I hope the evening is pleasant
for the little ones.
Pumpkins and mums
are passing time
till the first frost
claims their end.
Autumn engenders
the wintry time
I question whether
I can anymore
endure its season.
Yet special things reemerge
the warmth of an embrace
the death and hibernation
of life
the shelter of the soul
from the impending season
the sacramental invoices
to preclude the spring
the prayers to pray
and to live for
once again.
But as I said
there is work to be done
the leaves to rake
the securing of home
the changing of clothes
the very last harvest.
Beautiful October
I welcome you
and I fear you.
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Copyright © October 2012 Medard Louis Lefevre Jr.
Additional Notes:
Sorry about punctuation. I just don't remember anymore.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-10-27 16:18:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Medard, I rarely use punctuation instead I let the line breaks work for me. To indicate a new sentence I use caps on the first word of the line. Autumn is a lovely time of year and yes it does require a lot of time to ready ourselves for winter. This could be used as a metaphor for life and the way we ready ourselves for old age. Either way it is a beautiful poem with a touch of melancholy. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-10-20 14:22:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Medard, I have tried to separate the experience from the moment. October, there is something permutable about the coming and the ending, yet also endearing. I could, were it to gain- fish the trout and dream of the pumpkin.
It is the changing of seasons, really the only insolvent change. Certainly summer and winter are notable, but spring, as with October, these are –pleasant evenings- as you speak so.
-special things reemerge- is probably as apt a description as any I have heard. The preparation for the harvest, the colder times, -death and hibernation- almost a metaphoric insinuation, are tugs to the heart. –prayers- as you speak, are of reaches beyond the harsher times, and yet have their own genesis in what October, where the John the Baptist speculation of spring is anecdote enough.
I enjoyed this read, the personal reflections and the larger global view. Now to the next day, that the road, as prepared, reflects.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-10-12 02:58:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
This is a great expressive piece! I love the ending. Your lines are clever and fresh. Your title is tantalizing.
the death and hibernation .....omit 'the' and make this one line?
of life
winter forebodes
its cold-hearted presence......word choices made this idea a bit of a 'bump' in reading. I dont really think
you need this thought ? maybe it's an extra line that could be removed?
But as I said .... this is unusual and perfect for its punch! Fitting too as it brings the thought back
Beautiful October
I welcome you
and I fear you .....I stand in awe ....
This is a masterpiece work. I really like it. Those few things I offer because it really doesnt need anything. Its good.
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