This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-12-14 18:05:36 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A Child of Gold The manger filled with haloed gold
where Baby lays His holy head
while streams of stars that shine are bold
and limn the sky like silver thread
An angel’s harp with strings embrace
the manger filled with haloed gold
where starlight glows on His sweet face
asleep are lambs in heaven’s fold
And even though the air is cold
the wise will travel far to see
the manger filled with haloed gold
then fall upon their bended knee
to pray in silent words of thought
then laud the Prince their eyes behold
and thank the God above who brought
the manger filled with haloed gold
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Copyright © December 2010 cheyenne smyth
Additional Notes:
Merry Christmas to all.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-12-20 16:24:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.72727
A beautiful gift, written by you than has put a sincere smile on my face. Once again you've embraced content, which is the true meaning of Christmas and tenderly painted a picture for all readers to enjoy!
In your heart lies this gift, in your mind lies these talents that pour out on paper through your soul.
I am so pleased, and so happy to be able to read your poetry.
blessings to you as well, for a very Merry Christmas.
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-12-18 09:11:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I am gladdened by the references. Not one to complain about the “crass commercialization†of Christmas (everything has its place) nevertheless, in this environment a reference to the reason is always a blessing.
I am not sure of the reference material for that morning- and being candid; the song “away in the manger†where baby Jesus never cries, for me, is beyond Pollyannaish- but I find a tranquility in your verse. I could see why shepherds would be impressed.
One thing I find in allegory- is the projection of the gift to be, written in the gift just given. Resting in that place is the propitiation of the future. The reference is foretelling.
A nice Christmas piece.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2010-12-15 03:20:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Classic! Well written and well rhymed.
Merry Christmas,
Medard
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-12-15 00:44:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Cheyenne, this is a wonderful poem especially fit for the season. I'm so delight to read and review your delicious poem. Your verbiage is rich in textures as your well rhymed meter carries the reader through your verse. I can not give you one line I like best for surely the others would weep with envy. Simply perfection, my dear. Lora
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