This Poem was Submitted By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-10-08 15:44:14 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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After Katrina

If I were a poem, I'd flow with fury right now Separating wisdom and virtue  Without ever knowing how.   If I were a poem, I'd ride the beats of African drums Releasing fear and bitterness Upon the rising of our sons.   I'd be poetic words In search of better tomorrows. I'd be answers to questions Birthed from our sorrows   Was it because of our status That help passed us by? Was it because of history That we watched each other die?   These are our questions, And we ask them duly, But can anyone, will anyone   Answer us truthfully?   If I were a poem, I'd flow with fury right now. But because I'm human I write the madness down.   We watched the horror As it played out on TV, New Orleans in chaos Under waters far too deep.   American babies crying, The elderly weak and lost, Americans left to perish, As gangsters became boss.   Too many days In filthy clothes, When help would come, Nobody knows.   Streets paved in trash, No security in sight, The dead left to die, Where ever they might.   Horrific, embarrassing, A travesty it was . . .  When the government waits To aid its own citizens.   Where was America The great white hope Securing the Middle East From dictatorship's scope.   The world watched in awe As the victims endured hell. And though help finally came, There are many stories to tell   Of the natural disaster Known as Katrina And the inept response Of what America calls FEMA.

Copyright © October 2005 Latorial D. Faison


This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2005-11-04 09:39:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
But YOU are a poem! Everything you do and are is a poem. It shows up in the physicality of your writings. You are being heard. Good synopsis of the disaster. There is a Canadian millionaire that is building homes free of charge to house up to 150 persons on the west coast of florida. Forgive me because I cannot recall his name. It was on the news this morning. Peace/shalom, oh now I remember....his name is Jack Stronach. Have you heard of it?


This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2005-10-25 15:40:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Latorial, This is a gut wrenching piece and the fact that everything you have written is true makes it even more so. Yes...where was the help these poor people begged for? Where was the government with all their fancy talk about freedom and democracy...where were they when their own people needed them? The whole thing angers me so that it was hard to read this poem. It is so well crafted and thought out...you left no stome un-turned in your descriptions of that fateful hurricane. Some of those people will never recover, never be able to re-build what they had...even if it wasn't much it belonged to them and was all they had. The children got to me the most and I do wonder how many lost their parents and who is taking care of them now? Such a sad time in our history in what the world sees as the richest nation in the world. There should never be a child, or anyone for that matter, who goes to bed hungry or without a roof over their head. Well done and well written...something that should be read by many...bravo! Blessings....Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2005-10-13 20:28:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 5.00000
You had me going. For awhile I was with you. Then you got lost in the moment and let it drown in the wave you began. Shorten this. It is great as a smaller piece. Gut it down to the initial idea. tom
This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2005-10-11 19:43:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Latorial--I've already reviewd this or my senility is worse than I thought. In any case, my sentiments/remarks/comments are the same: Well now, why don't you just speak up--stop biting your tongue! This captive audience is spellbound, but not sur- prised or even shocked: you had been awfully sedate for some time--had put aside the soap box (at least the activists one). Now it appears you've stepped back “up there” with a vengeance- kudos. No, I don’t think you left anyone unscathed in this one. Clearly a gross case of placing inexperienced cronies in posi- tions that’s come back to haunt this “administration’s/admini- strator.” The absolutely worst thing is that this rewarding of past political deeds served to placed many folks in even more harmful/desperate situations. As your poem of address has vehe- mently stated/inferenced: the fallout from these terrible deci- sions/indecisions/delayed responses are taken personally and leave some fairly nasty “After...” tastes. Thanks for the fire! TLW
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2005-10-08 21:00:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Hi Latorial, I like the political undertones in this and its relevation of social injustices. You've used poetry to its fullest in striking at the core of the imbalances in human order. There is a bubbling anger and frustration written in these lines that reveal the state of the poets mind and in many ways the minds of all those who felt neglected in the aftermath. Rhyme has always been my favorite poetic form and this read marches with a thump in its beat. I would suggest looking at the meter a little closer though...there are verses which break from the uniformity of the piece. For example ---- verse 5, 7, In verse 11, 'citizens' breaks from the rhyme scheme..which leads to a kind of abrupt jerk in the read. The end was perfect and a fine slap in the face. The meter can always be ironed out but what really is important is conveying strong emotion which has been rendered with strength. Looking forward to reading more!! Take care, Duane.
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